. ,“ . Unwsrslty cd Cahfornim L%T LOSALAMOSSCIENTIFIC LABORATORY POWOllloe Box l&13 LoeAl-, In t4w Me)doo67S45 rc@yrOtMtciHH-42 400 Mm! Au&uat 4, 195~ ,. . Dr. Uilllam J. ~ir R=ttelle ‘Paoii’ie NorLhwq&ItLab, ‘P. 0. Box 999 RlotIMuxt, Wmhi ngtmr ~fJ~fi2 Bear Bill: ?4Y reedlleqtion still remains that the Bikini wentd the w*M mliation in the title tQ stand out by wing smaller type for the remaln(ter. Aa it la, thti does not. acccxaplieh their wishes. 1. Cover. people 2. Glossary I quwiop makesbled MM have auord for it, ubettw the atM4wW “W!* WV-w WI mm imythiIIuM Wm, if thay why dufine it? The we ot th= UCM@‘@clla= Ln the narrow det’inition rollowed by thw dotinltton or o-11* rmis.m qummtlehm. Xit fair to may that thOS@ oel~s ‘... Join together to make Up *@h part . ..* of the blood. Another remaon to eliminate the marrou definition. We talked a bit about pre!’er tQ put thtm in the it standt), the definition includes the word ‘energya until wa reach radiation. 3. IM.r$oduetiorr - next the order of words. 1 would order in uhioh they oocur. As or the UQrd alpha, fQr example, mod this la hot explained to laat parag. The purpose of this paragraph uafiW wluin that,alUwIIStf thu Utl!mt ploturea and aany or th~ uorda ars the samo&ain the booklut, thwa hwo been changes t~, hopafully, some of the lnforrnatlon. Ir Utla la not the aentenoe as it inoluded, 1 aea no purpose to leaving Rwetak ohrify m now. 4. lhlngs Il!iat Are Nadleao$lve Thm =cond sentence seorno to be an improper plaoe to lntrodu~ hdlne. For Lhe others, U@were carerul to introduce tham by name and, thsrr, dmacribe the Pw-mg. u. .